Seems pretty tidy to me, although I haven't listened on the downstairs stereo, while going for a walk or in the car yet

OK, new vocal mix here. Mainly based on what @Greg_L said about a fattie wearing baggie clothes and what I learned from doing the latest mix of Road Crew.
So, I've changed:
The reverb impulse for a much shorter one to try and avoid the sea-shell sound
Reduced the "vocal fattener" delay effect so that its only just noticeable when I turn it off.
Reduced the overall level of reverb.
Made the lead vocal a little louder.
Made the double tracking quieter so you can only just about tell its there when you flick it on and off.