Oh Please

[Ironbarkbob]

Hello all. This is my attempt at a Roy Orbison style song. I had more delay on the vocal but after mixing down it sounded to much.
This was written in Band in a Box and mixed with studio one. As I haven't been using Studio for long, Im still work on getting my master template up to scratch and I have plenty to learn. All comments and suggestions welcome. Rob
Oh Please

[rayc]

Rob,
the solo ends prematurely - either a few more notes or something else is needed to pick up to the next part.
Cool if it had a mass of strings like a Big O big ballad to augment or replace the pedal steel.
The bass is a little loud.
You seem to have tamed the essing quite a bit more this time.
The only lyrical issue I have is the line
"You have all my love please take it all" I know it's only rock n roll but that line doesn't really work. Something like "I'd give you my love - please take it all" would make more sense BUT it's only rnr so no biggie.
Time for you to add a comment, thought or suggestion to the work of others mate.

[Ironbarkbob]

Thanks Ray. Appreciate your feedback. Haven't commented on others as yet as I really need to know what I'm talking about. The expertise here is way above me. But will keep that in mind. Rob

[rayc]

The expertise here is way above me.

Mate, that's kind of you to say but a simple "that's cool" or "How did you do?" that would go down a treat.

[vomitHatSteve]

Time for you to add a comment, thought or suggestion to the work of others mate.

"Oh Please" comment on my posts?

It's a pretty good mix. I can hear everything pretty clearly throughout.
My only real nits are that that hard-panned acoustic on the let sounds very close to my ear, and there seems to be a lot happening in the low mids. The mix is clear, but seems darker or busier than it should.

[einstein magoo]

Iron, cool song, good vocal, just way too much bass on my end. Bass hit that first note and I had to grab the vol knob, then turning down the bass enough to hear the tune lost most of the guitars and other elements. I just think you have some levels to deal with and the bass, in a addition to being too loud is also not distinct. The lines are good, just needs some volume drop and eq? Like it though.