Look On

[CrowsofFritz]

Decided to do some experimenting out of my comfort zone.

This is unfinished and only a little polished. But I kinda like it!

https://soundcloud.com/aarontaylorsmalls/look-on

[rayc]

The beginning seems to shamble along until it hits a groove.
The guitars are interesting. The high vocal is well done.
Sounds a bit like Pearl Jam without histrionics mixed with a bit of Kurt.

[CrowsofFritz]

The beginning seems to shamble along until it hits a groove.
The guitars are interesting. The high vocal is well done.
Sounds a bit like Pearl Jam without histrionics mixed with a bit of Kurt.

Thanks ray. I’m debating if I am gonna put the effort to finish this lol.

[WhiskeyJack]

The beginning seems to shamble along until it hits a groove.
The guitars are interesting. The high vocal is well done.
Sounds a bit like Pearl Jam without histrionics mixed with a bit of Kurt.

Thanks ray. I’m debating if I am gonna put the effort to finish this lol.

I think you should. It has a lot of potential and is a pretty interesting departure for you. I really like it.

I feel like there is something holding it back. It's just not gelling in terms of all the parts moving together cohesively. Like maybe you recorded the vocals and one instrument together at the same time first and then went and added the drums afterwards or something. It's just not moving along "together" if that makes sense. All the individual parts are simplistic enough this should just flow like water.

I think you should keep on it Crows. for sure.

[CrowsofFritz]

Thanks ray. I’m debating if I am gonna put the effort to finish this lol.

I think you should. It has a lot of potential and is a pretty interesting departure for you. I really like it.

I feel like there is something holding it back. It's just not gelling in terms of all the parts moving together cohesively. Like maybe you recorded the vocals and one instrument together at the same time first and then went and added the drums afterwards or something. It's just not moving along "together" if that makes sense. All the individual parts are simplistic enough this should just flow like water.

I think you should keep on it Crows. for sure.

Thanks Whiskey! I’ll hVe to revisit it another day where I’m not exhausted. Today was my day off so that was possible. I’ve found myself not recording as much lately.

[WhiskeyJack]

I think you should. It has a lot of potential and is a pretty interesting departure for you. I really like it.

I feel like there is something holding it back. It's just not gelling in terms of all the parts moving together cohesively. Like maybe you recorded the vocals and one instrument together at the same time first and then went and added the drums afterwards or something. It's just not moving along "together" if that makes sense. All the individual parts are simplistic enough this should just flow like water.

I think you should keep on it Crows. for sure.

Thanks Whiskey! I’ll hVe to revisit it another day where I’m not exhausted. Today was my day off so that was possible. I’ve found myself not recording as much lately.

My man, if anyone on this forum underatands how a day (sometimes all dayong job) hinders the creative process its me.

Dont shelf this one is all im suggesting. Lots of potential here man.

[musicturtle]

I agree with the others. It is a nice rough draft if you will, but needs to be pulled together.

I really like your falsetto in this one. And as always, you vocals in your natural range are very expressive. I would definitely explore this one further.

[CrowsofFritz]

I agree with the others. It is a nice rough draft if you will, but needs to be pulled together.

I really like your falsetto in this one. And as always, you vocals in your natural range are very expressive. I would definitely explore this one further.

Thanks! Will definitely re-record this one when I get the chance.

[vomitHatSteve]

+1 on the timing being pretty spotty in the beginning.

Mix wise, the kick definitely could use some more body. I'd probably take the drums up overall. Maybe vox down a little.

The vocal harmonies are cool.

[TripleM]

I think this will be a really good song.

On this recording I thought the vocal was nice and clear and I liked the crunch guitar sound. The bass sound wasn't bad either.

But yeah the performances, especially early, are a little loose.

Agree - nice harmonies.

A double tracked vocal for the final version would probably work well.

edit - a few pitch problems later in the song. And that was kind of a Lil' Wayne guitar solo near the end.

[CrowsofFritz]

Thanks @vomitHatSteve @TripleM

I’ll be sure to fix these issues in the final draft!

[CrowsofFritz]

Fixed the timing, fixed the solo, used my new mic and pop filter for vocals, and I found my BOSS DS1 distortion pedal in the basement and used it instead of a plugin. I like it more. It’s in the first post.

[Alison]

What a different departure for you! Love it! My only thing about this is that your vocals could use some "dressing". They seem a bit flat to me. Maybe some reverb or. . . what I don't know fills volumes but, my ears seem to want something more.
Nice song!

[CrowsofFritz]

What a different departure for you! Love it! My only thing about this is that your vocals could use some "dressing". They seem a bit flat to me. Maybe some reverb or. . . what I don't know fills volumes but, my ears seem to want something more.
Nice song!

Thanks Alison! I usually don’t like reverb but I think more will fit this song!

[vomitHatSteve]

Drum timing sounds solid now.

Verse vocals are a little dark on this listen.

Can you do the falsetto part in chest voice? I think having both could help fill it out nicely and might also be an interesting effect.
or maybe do an octave down part in the BG?

[CrowsofFritz]

Drum timing sounds solid now.

Verse vocals are a little dark on this listen.

Can you do the falsetto part in chest voice? I think having both could help fill it out nicely and might also be an interesting effect.
or maybe do an octave down part in the BG?

Definitely can’t do the high in chest voice, but I can certainly do if an octave down! Thanks for giving a second listen!