The Dream's Malfunction

[vomitHatSteve]

I didn't listen super-critically on a first pass, but it sounded pretty good.

[TripleM]

I think it's shaping up pretty well.

At first I thought you might have taken too much "umph" out of the snare. But after listening a while, I think it's sounding pretty good.

It's sounding really nice.

[Armistice]

I'm redoing the last 16 bars - it was pointed out that I had a long ending but not a big ending....

So I'm getting Cyril, my drummer, to work a bit harder under threat of death, have given my virtual choir some more weetbix, and will do some moar guitar tracks... not done yet... hopefully up tomorrow. I know what to do - just a matter of executing....

[Ausrock]

I'd have a listen then tell you how shithouse it was ......but I'm getting over a feast at a Chinese restaurant in Tuncurry, sitting on my cousin's balcony after 11pm while looking at lights reflecting across the water of a bay that carries my families' name and my laptop speakers are crap.

May make comment once I'm home in a couple of days and have the near fields available.

[rayc]

I'd have a listen then tell you how shithouse it was ......but I'm getting over a feast at a Chinese restaurant in Tuncurry, sitting on my cousin's balcony after 11pm while looking at lights reflecting across the water of a bay that carries my families' name and my laptop speakers are crap.

May make comment once I'm home in a couple of days and have the near fields available.

The picturesque way of saying "Later dude!".

[Armistice]

I'd have a listen then tell you how shithouse it was ......but I'm getting over a feast at a Chinese restaurant in Tuncurry, sitting on my cousin's balcony after 11pm while looking at lights reflecting across the water of a bay that carries my families' name and my laptop speakers are crap.

May make comment once I'm home in a couple of days and have the near fields available.

Take a number and get in line pal...

I think I've been to that restaurant. Does it have a tiled floor and double as a cafe in the daytime?

Anyway, the new version with the busier ending and extra stuff is now up at the link....

[Ausrock]

I'd have a listen then tell you how shithouse it was ......but I'm getting over a feast at a Chinese restaurant in Tuncurry, sitting on my cousin's balcony after 11pm while looking at lights reflecting across the water of a bay that carries my families' name and my laptop speakers are crap.

May make comment once I'm home in a couple of days and have the near fields available.

Take a number and get in line pal...

I think I've been to that restaurant. Does it have a tiled floor and double as a cafe in the daytime?

Anyway, the new version with the busier ending and extra stuff is now up at the link....

Sounds like you went to a different place, although it may depend on how long ago you may have been there......it may have been different then.

[SweetDan]

...the new version with the busier ending and extra stuff is now up at the link....

Your posts for this tune started out great, and just keeps getting better with each update. My only gripe being that since you're replacing the file out there on the internet instead of uploading and linking to a new file, we'll never be able to retrace your steps and learn (as much as is possible through mere observation) how it was you made it better as you went along.

I'm redoing the last 16 bars - it was pointed out that I had a long ending but not a big ending....

So I'm getting Cyril, my drummer, to work a bit harder under threat of death, have given my virtual choir some more weetbix, and will do some moar guitar tracks... not done yet... hopefully up tomorrow. I know what to do - just a matter of executing....

Cyril may have put in a touch too many 16-note triplets there at the end. Emphasis on *may* - I'm not saying "he" did in fact play too many of those triplets, just that he might have. And it might have been just the one fill around 5'43". And a double-stroke thing around 6'03". Maybe. I'm not sure. And if it were too many hits on the snare, it would have been a quantity so slight as to be almost imperceptible. Almost. Check with "him" again regarding those few, tiny phrases; see what he thinks...

(EDIT: Re-thinking what I wrote, "too many" implies I think fewer notes need to be in those phrases, and that isn't exactly what I mean. I like the musical statement those phrases make and wouldn't want them to be changed, but I think they could be stated a bit more subtly. Leaving all the notes there but turning some of those "too many" notes into ghost notes might be a better solution.)


You know, this time as I was listening, it really felt like your music carried me off to a different place. It probably did every time I've listened to it (which is why I keep coming back), but this time I recognized "Hey, here we go!" That was neat.

[Armistice]

Cyril may have put in a touch too many 16-note triplets there at the end. Emphasis on *may* - I'm not saying "he" did in fact play too many of those triplets, just that he might have. And it might have been just the one fill around 5'43". And a double-stroke thing around 6'03". Maybe. I'm not sure. And if it were too many hits on the snare, it would have been a quantity so slight as to be almost imperceptible. Almost. Check with "him" again regarding those few, tiny phrases; see what he thinks...

(EDIT: Re-thinking what I wrote, "too many" implies I think fewer notes need to be in those phrases, and that isn't exactly what I mean. I like the musical statement those phrases make and wouldn't want them to be changed, but I think they could be stated a bit more subtly. Leaving all the notes there but turning some of those "too many" notes into ghost notes might be a better solution.)


You know, this time as I was listening, it really felt like your music carried me off to a different place. It probably did every time I've listened to it (which is why I keep coming back), but this time I recognized "Hey, here we go!" That was neat.

Thanks Dan - yeah normally with the attachment function we generally use, I'll just add a new attachments then at the end, when everyone's done, go and delete all the previous versions, keeping just the final up. However the size limit got me this time. It's now increased, but too late for this tune alas...

I shall certainly get Cyril to examine his playing at the points you mention - there's also a crash just before the end I want to take out - or maybe I've already done that, I can't remember and I'm nowhere near the studio just now, so it will have to wait for tomorrow evening. In the end I only added a single new guitar track in the last 16 bars - just a chord strum on the Tele with some tremolo that pans across L-R and back a few times - not even sure it's even audible but I can "feel" its presence somehow - and I added a synth "strings" patch and turned a few things up a touch and that was it, apart from letting Cyril off the chain.

Appreciate your kind words - taking people off to a different place with music is a pretty good outcome, I reckon. Happy with that...